I am sure that you have already found this about two hundred times in all the other profiles. First Date: I don’t think it matters what we do on a first date, and I am a big fan of simplicity, so a coffee and walk would be just fine.” This is just one example of a profile that will stand out as different and arguable better than most other pages written by guys on the online dating sites.
After a while, all the profiles sound the same, full of similar clichés and adjectives.
So, lets look at a few typical examples of bad profiles: “I am not good at writing about myself, but my friends say that I am intelligent, professional, educated and ambitious. I am looking to a meet an intelligent, beautiful woman for dating and relationship.” – at first, this looks like a well-written profile by a guy who seems to have head on his shoulders. There is nothing “catchy” about this profile – there is nothing that would compel a reader to stop and respond to it.
However, it has one major flaw that will make many women skip over it. Lets look at another bad profile: “I went to school in the east coast, but now I work for a major software company where I work up the corporate ladder. I love hiking, watching baseball, and bbq on weekends.” – the writer must be reminded that this is a dating profile – not a resume or a sales presentation in front of his human resources department. as a rule, you should never start your profile by talking about school or work, as it’s not interesting and not really relevant to what you should be trying to achieve – to catch a woman’s attention.” “I love to have fun, party, dance, and drink of my buddies.
But when I started writing people’s online dating profiles for e-Cyrano.com, all that changed. By the end of our phone call, I’d pare down what they’d said into an enticing short story while marketing their date-ability in the process.
I’d make sure that every sentence focused on what the reader—your future boyfriend or girlfriend—could expect when dating you.